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The tables give information about the average hours work by part-time and full-time men and women in three countries in Europe in 2002 and compare them with the European countries.

The tables present the average number of
hours
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 worked by
men
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 and
women
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 in part-time and full-time employment in Greece, the Netherlands and the
UK
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 in 2002, with comparisons to the
European
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 average.
Overall
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, Greece consistently recorded the longest working
hours
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 in both employment categories,
whereas
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 the
UK
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 showed the shortest figures, particularly for full-time workers.
In addition
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, males generally worked longer than females across all three countries. With regard to full-time employment, Greek
men
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 work the most, at an average of 42,5
hours
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 per week, followed by Greek
women
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 at 39,9
hours
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. Both figures exceed the
European
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 average of 40,4
hours
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 for
men
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 and 39,2
hours
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 for
women
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. In the Netherlands,
men
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 and
women
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 worked an identical 38
hours
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, slightly below the
European
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 benchmark but still higher than in the
UK
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.
By contrast
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, the
UK
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 recorded the shortest full-time working
hours
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, with
women
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 working 37
hours
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 and
men
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 37,5
hours
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 per week. Regarding part-time workers, Greece again ranked highest, with
men
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 and
women
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 working 30 and 29,3
hours
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 respectively,
although
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 these figures were still lower than the
European
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 averages of 32
hours
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 for
men
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 and 34
hours
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 for
women
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. Part-time
hours
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 in the Netherlands were more modest,
while
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 the
UK
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 reported the lowest levels
overall
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, at 29
hours
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 for
men
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 and 28
hours
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 for
women
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, men, women, uk, european with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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