The pie chart shows the percentage of persons arrested in the five years ending 1994 and the bar chart shows the most recent reasons for arrest. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The two pie charts compare the personal
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among men and women
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in five years ending 1994,
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the bar chart illustrates the reasons for the most recent arrest. Units are measured in percentage.
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, personal
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among
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rates among
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males
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more than
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among females
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in 1994,
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public drinking is the main factor
throughout
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both genders in recent years. With regard to the pie charts,
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a majority
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of males accounted for 32%, which was larger than the share of females by a
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staggering
margin of 23%. Turning to the reasons for
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recent arrest, there is a significant difference between public drinking among both genders on the one hand, and other remaining reasons on the other. Public drinking represented around 37%
throughout
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men, which is larger than the share of women by a narrow margin of 7%, as the former ranks first. Driving
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and drinking
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among males is almost double as large as females,
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for 27% and 13%, respectively.
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, assault among men
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the same as the
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proportion
for theft,
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for about 16%.
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, the figure for no answer had the lowest proportion among genders,
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for 4% and 7%, respectively, as both of them
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last
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 79%.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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