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The graph shows average annual expenditures on cell phone and residential phone services between 2001 and 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

An illustration depicts the
avarage
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average
 cost that
customer
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customers
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 spend
mobile
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on mobile
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 and residential
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phone
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phones
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 from 2001 to 2010
Overall
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, spending
residential
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on residential
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phone
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services
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 dramatically declined,
whereas
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the populatirty
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populatirty
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popularity
 of mobile
services
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 increased sharply over the decade In 2001, spending
mobile
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on mobile
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phone
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services
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 started
nearly
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 200$,
while
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 the
expenditure
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of
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on
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 residential
phone
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services
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 started from 700$. Following five years annual
expenditure
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of
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on
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 residential
service
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services
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 gradually dropped to below 600$,
whereas
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expenditure
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the expenditure
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of
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on
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 mobile
phone
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services
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 soared over 500$ In 2006, spending
residential
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on residential
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phone
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services
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 decreased steadily
reaching
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 nearly 400$,
while
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expenditure
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of
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on
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 cell
phone
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services
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 significantly increased to over 700$ at
end
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the end
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 of the decade

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas, while".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words phone, services, expenditure with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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