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the threat of nuclear weapons maintain word peace. nuclear power provides cheap and clean energy. the benefits of nuclear technology for outweigh the diadvantages. to what extent do you agree or disagre? give reason for your answer and include any relevant example from your knowledge or experience.

Nuclear
weapons
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 are a threat to world peace as they pose significant risks. Meanwhile, nuclear power
are
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is are
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 cheap and clean energy option. I strongly disagree with
given
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the given
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 statement as they have
power
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the power
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 to destroy
whole
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the whole
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 world in just minutes.
However
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, in some
cases
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cases,
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 they can be useful to slow down the moment of abnormal activity.
As a
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result
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result,
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 of growing nuclear technology around
world
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the world
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 is increasing significantly
such
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as
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with
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 nuclear plants
are establishing
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being established
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 in every corner of countries. One example of
this
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Russia
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is Russia
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 is the most powerful
country
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 in nuclear making in recent research
they
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. They
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 have one of the
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largest most
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most and
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and most
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huge
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powerful
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amount
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amounts
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 of bombs and nuclear
weapons
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I
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. I
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can say that they
had
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have
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 tested on Ukraine as well.
Moreover
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, nuclear
can
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weapons can
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a
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be used a
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blackmailing
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blackmail
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weapons
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apply
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as well
such
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 as
powerful
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a powerful
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country
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 can
extortion to
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extort
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 smaller countries to take over that
country
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.
For
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instance
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instance,
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 America is
threaten
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threatening
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to
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apply
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Bangladesh to build
army
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an army
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 camp in their own
country
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, so it is easy to rule over
on
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apply
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it.
Although
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,
from
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in
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 my
person
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personal
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 opinion
in
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, in
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such
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case
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a case
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 of hush money leader can protect their
country
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 by taking
help
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the help
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 of
military
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the military
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. Once upon
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a time
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time
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time,
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 India was
threaten
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threatened
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 by very serious anomalous
behavior
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behaviour
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form
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from
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neighbor
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the neighbouring
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country
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so
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, so
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 they just replied
them
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to them
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 back with they
can
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could
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 launch
nuclear
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a nuclear
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 rocket
any
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at any
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 time to save
his
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their
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country
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.
Also
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,
china
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China
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silently
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is silently
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 saving
his
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its
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country
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 by
such
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 things as they are getting higher in every
sectors
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sector
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so
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, so
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 they are
also
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 getting bowl in
own
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their own
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 court.
Finally
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, keeping every
aspects
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aspect
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 in
mind
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mind,
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individual
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individuals
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has life
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have the right
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 to enjoy
peacefully
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life peacefully
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countries
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. Countries
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 should not
be
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apply
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use more
weapons
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like
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apply
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that
who
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apply
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can harm physically and mentally
whatever
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. Whatever
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hustles
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threats
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came
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come
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 during threat it can be
solve
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solved
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 be cold war
as
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. as
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 well at
last
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 I would prefer
they
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that they
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 do not need to use
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this kind
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these kinds
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 of
weapons
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.

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task response
Make your view clear in the first part. Say if you agree or not and give a short reason.
coherence
Use a plan: intro, 2 or 3 body parts, short conclusion. Each part has one idea.
accuracy
Check facts. Do not use wrong or un true claims. Use safe, simple facts you know.
coherence
Use simple link words to show cause, contrast and example. e.g., but, also, for example.
language
Use short and clear sentences. Avoid long, hard to read. Read aloud to check.
idea
The writer has a clear view and tries to give reasons.
content
Some real life examples are used.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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