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Band 1

Average percentages of sodium saturated fats and added typical meals consumed in the USA. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The
pie
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 charts provided illustrate the average
proportion
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 of
sodium
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, saturated fats and added sugars in typical diets consumed in America
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,
sodium
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 and saturated fat showed the largest
proportion
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 in dinner,
while
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 added sugar accounted
the
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for the
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 largest in snacks.
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, people tend to consume three different nutrients equally in breakfast. Looking at the
pie
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 chart more closely, one can see that
sodium
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 and saturated fat consumed
composed
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are composed
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 similar
proportion
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 in a day. In both
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 charts, dinner showed the largest
proportion
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: 43% and 37%, respectively.
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, in added sugar, the distribution represented a huge gap compared to the other two
pie
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chart
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charts
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. Snack accounted for 42%
in
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of
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 added sugar,
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 the other two nutrients consumed as
snack
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snacks
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 made up 14% 21%.
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, all nutrients consumed as breakfast
comprised
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ranged from 14% to 16%.
Sodium
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 consumed
in
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at
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 lunch was 3% higher than
saturated
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apply
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fat
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that
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had
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consumed
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as
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at
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 lunch.

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task response
Give a full view of the task. Start with what the charts show in one line, then add a few clear facts from the data.
coherence and cohesion
Keep links between ideas simple. Use easy linking words like 'and', 'but', 'also', 'then', 'however'.
overview
There is an opening line that states the topic.
content
The essay tries to compare and point to meals such as dinner and snacks.
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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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