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The table below shows the results of surveys in 2000, 2005 and 2010 about one university

The table chart demonstrates the outcome of
enquiry
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an enquiry
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 about the five distinct fields of a university in three different
years
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 ( 2000, 2005, 2010).
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the
amount
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number
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 of students who gave good ratings for the
Print
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Resource
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, Technical Quality, and Electronic
Resource
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 increased over the period
,
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;
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however
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 Range of modules offered declined. But
Building
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building
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/teaching Facilities ratings remained unchanged.
While
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Print
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Resource
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 was getting the highest interest point from the pupils,
Range
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the Range
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 of modules offered was the lowest
one
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apply
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.
Print
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Resource
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 started from
87
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a 87
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% rate in 2000, increased by 2% in 2005,
however
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, it amounted to 88%,
it
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which
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 was
the one of
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one of the
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 highest aspects in 2010. Even though, Electronic
Resource
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 rate was
same
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the same
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 as
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Print
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the Print
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resource
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 in 2010,
was
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it was
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 45
percent
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per cent
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 10
years
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 ago. It skyrocketed during
5
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the 5
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years
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 and stood at 72%, and increased by 16% in 2010. Technical Quality inclined and constituted 69%,
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however
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however,
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 it
flactuated
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fluctuated
 over 10
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years
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10-year
 period.
Range
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The range
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 of modules offered had the lowest satisfaction point from students with starting
32
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at 32
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% in 2000, and it decreased slightly to 30% in 2005,
stood
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and stood
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 at 27% in 2010.
However
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, Building/teaching Facilities proportion of good
rating
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ratings
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 stayed stable at 77% during the whole timeframe.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words years, print, resource with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 2 times.
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