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_Nowadays technology is influencing modern art in areas such as design, painting and film._ *Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

These days it
is
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has
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 become increasingly common to see how
technology
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 is promoting modern
art
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 in several sectors
including
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, including
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 design, painting and filming. I am of the opinion that
this
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 trend might bring two main problems in the long run. One primary negative outcome of
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developing
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development
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 of modern
art
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 in
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art
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the art
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 industry might affect on quality and reality of
art
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.
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 to say, when artist start to use and engage more
technology
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on
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in
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 their field, they could lose popularity and
honor
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 around the globe.
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,
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a machine
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machine drawn
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machine-drawn
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 Mona Lisa might become
ordinary
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an ordinary
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 picture
by
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through
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 multiple series from AI.
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, museums,
gallaries
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galleries
 and
also
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overall
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the overall
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art
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 industry might face
huge
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a huge
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 decrease. People would
choice
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choose
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many options
than
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over
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 original
art
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, because of their similarity.
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, using
technology
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on
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in
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this
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these
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 spheres
always should
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should always
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controlled
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be controlled
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 by special agencies
from
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of
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authorities
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the authorities
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. Another negative impact is that young talents might be
recognized
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recognised
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.
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,
when
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apply
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if young people are interested in
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 areas
including
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, including
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 painting and filming
but
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, but
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could not
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cannot
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 engage fully or even get enough experience, their potential and skills would
underdeveloped
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be underdeveloped
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.
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, millions of adults with
high
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a high
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 level of
creative
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creativity
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 these days are
replaced
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being replaced
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 by modern AI technologies, making
impossible
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it impossible
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 for them to practise and develop.
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,talented unremarkable generation become
for ed
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forced
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 to leave their future dream
on
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apply
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A
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apply
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half way
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halfway
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.
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, despite of unchangeable abilities of modern
technology
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, regardless of their experience
human
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, human
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resource
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resources
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 must be enrolled in
this
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 term. In conclusion, if modern
art
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 is fully engaged
on
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in
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art
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the art
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sectors
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sector
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, ignoring human abilities, the consequences are loss of interest and future
artist
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artists
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.

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task response
Make your view clear at the start and keep it through the essay.
coherence
Add two or three main ideas and give one example for each, then explain why it shows your point.
coherence
Link ideas with simple words like first, then, however, and use clear order.
language
Check small grammar errors (for example, 'it has become' instead of 'it is become') and keep sentences short and plain.
positioning
A clear view is shown.
structure
Two main ideas are given.
evidence
Some examples are used.
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