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The graph below shows the amounts of waste produced by three companies over a period of 15 years. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The present graph
ilustrates
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illustrates
 the quantity of
waste
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 produced by three companies in 2000, 2005, 2010 and 2015.
Overall
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,
company
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 A had the highest
amout
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amount
 of
waste
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 produced
while
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company
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 C had the lowest amount of
waste
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 produced. None of the companies showed stability during these 15 years. In 2000,
company
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 A accounted
12
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for 12
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tonnes
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 of
waste
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, followed by
company
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 B that accounted
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for aproximately
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aproximately
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approximately
 9
tonnes
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.
By contrast
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,
company
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 C recorded the lowest amount, around 3
tonnes
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 of
waste
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. By 2015,
company
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 B recorded a major decrease in
their
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its
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waste
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moving
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, moving
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 from around 9
tonnes
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 to 3
tonnes
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 of
waste
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.
Company
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 C,
that
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which
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 had the lowest
amout
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amount
 of
waste
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 in 2000, became the
company
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 with the
most
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largest
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 amount
recording
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, recording
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 almost 12
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tonnes
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tonnes,
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while
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Company
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 A had a
slightly
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slight
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 decrease in
their
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its
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 quantity of
waste
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words waste, company, tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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