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Student scores regarding pre-test and test among 5 students named Anna,Michael, Ryan, Erin and Cletus

The bar chart delineates key information regarding the obtained scores among 5 students regarding the assessment stages. Looking from an
overall
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 the figure regarding grades for each term obtained by Cletus did not display a remarkable difference between pre-
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According to
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 what is shown, Anna and Erin achieved 98% and 97% respectively,
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 in pre-tests
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 around 90%. The significant difference was observed in Ryan`s results on
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, making it 10% higher compared to pre-tests.
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 high as Ryan, Michael
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 experienced 6% lower grade on
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, the achieved grades from
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 performed by Cletus differed
only
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 1%,
which
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 82
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generated from
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However
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,
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 figure appeared as the
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 points among 5 pupils.

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Task response: start with one clear view of the chart, then give the facts for each student with the right numbers, and finish with a short line that sums up what the chart shows.
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Task response: keep to what the chart shows, and use only facts from it. Check numbers and write them in order for all five students.
coverage
The essay gives the main data for several students.
trend
It shows there is a big rise in Ryan’s test score and a small change for Cletus.
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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