''Some people think that the best way to reduce crime is to give longer prison sentences. Others, however, believe there are better alternative ways of reducing crime. Discuss both views and give your opinion.''

There is no denying the fact that
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crime completely is not possible.
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, people are trying to find a
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to reduce it.
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it is a commonly held belief that some of them say that the prison term should be longer, there is
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an argument that says there are lots of different ways to stop people from committing crimes.
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will
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analyse
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topic from both points and express my opinion. On one hand, making longer prison sentences is not the best
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because humans usually do not know the punishments for their actions.
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, they may think that they are not going to be arrested.
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, if you want
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method to
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you must warn them.
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, talk about it
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and put posters in the
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or other places.
On the other hand
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, different ways to reduce crime are plenty. It is
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possible to say that longer jail time is not the
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only
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.
Moreover
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, you may find a lot of alternative methods.
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, deploy more police officers around the city or the country,
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might make criminals think twice
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before
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, maybe trying to answer emergency calls faster could be an alternative
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. In conclusion, there
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no easy answer to
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question. On balance, I tend to believe that
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in prison
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is an excellent
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.
However
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, you may have more ways that will do the job.

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structure
Work on making your view clear in the end and keep it the same in the essay. Make sure the conclusion follows the body paragraphs.
coherence
Use linking words to show how each idea connects, and start each paragraph with a main idea sentence.
language
Fix spelling and grammar. Use simple, short sentences. Check words like stoping, eassy, analise, stors.
structure
Essay has an intro, two body parts and a conclusion, a standard layout.
content
There is an attempt to discuss both sides with phrases like on the other hand.
Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

Topic Vocabulary:
  • deterrent
  • incapacitating
  • rehabilitation
  • recidivism
  • underlying issues
  • desperation
  • community service
  • mental health support
  • reintegration
  • prevention
  • offenders
  • punitive measures
  • support systems
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