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A friend has agreed to look after your six year old son, house and pet while you are working abroad for two weeks. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter • give instructions about your son with his everyday school routine • give instructions about how to care for your pet • give instructions about other household duties You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear .....................,

Dear Rajan, I hope you are doing well
,
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 I am writing
this
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 letter to
recall
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remind
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 you
the
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of the
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 duties which you will be taking
after
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over after
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 me.
Firstly
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, I thought I should tell you about my son's routine, so you can easily manage all the chores and
responsibily
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responsibilities
 according
the
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to the
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 schedule. My son is
early
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an early
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bird
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bird,
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 he wakes up early in
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the morning
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morning
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morning,
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then
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 he has his breakfast at 8:30 am.
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, he only prefers healthy snacks
at
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in
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morning
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the morning
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time
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apply
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, after he
goes
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goes,
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 I start my other house chores
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such
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, such
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 as
feed
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feeding
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 my pet, and watering my plants.
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,
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apply
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 my cat never asks
food
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for food
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, even
I
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though I
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give her food twice a day.
Additionally
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, when my child returns from school,
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then
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apply
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he goes
for
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to
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basketball
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a basketball
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 match daily for 2 hours.
after
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After
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come
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coming
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 from the
ground
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ground,
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 he used to take
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a nape
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nape
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nap
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 for a
while
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and
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, and
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 he will take
shower
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a shower
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 and
does
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do
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 his homework. I hope you will understand my whole day routine
and
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, and
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 hopefully you will manage these appropriately. I look forward to your response. Your loving, Rajan.

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structure
Organize with a clear plan. Start with a short plan for the day, then split into parts for the son’s routine, pet care, and other chores. Use times.
language-use
Use short, simple sentences. Use basic links like First, Then, After that to show order.
content
Be clear about tasks. Say exactly what to do: feed times, how many meals, when the boy comes home, when to care for the pet.
tone
Friendly tone and kind closing.
content
The letter shows you care and cover all needed topics.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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