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Online learning is becoming more popular in many countries. However, some people think traditional classroom learning is still more effective. Discuss both views

The benefits brought by online learning not only affect
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teachers
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. It has dramatically shifted the way we
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.
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e-learning provides convenience and flexibility. There
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 no fixed schedule
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 you can learn anywhere, anytime, requiring only a device and internet access.
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lots of online material
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 much more accessible
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 to online learning . You can find free online courses, science
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,
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, and more on the internet easily.
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, you can contact
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professors from different majors and countries, which broadens your horizon.
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virtual learning significantly reduces the tuition fee. Since there are no infrastructures,
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 employees, and lower
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 on transportation, some courses become more affordable
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 everyone have the chance to study.
On the other hand
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, traditional learning
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 benefits both
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 and
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, offering numerous advantages.
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 with, learning face-to-face allows
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 more interactive lessons. Not only can
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 talk, answer
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’
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 immediately, but they
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also can
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 carry out experiments in Chemistry or Physical
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lesson
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, the direct interaction between
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 and teacher strengthens the bonds between them
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 the lessons more effective.
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students
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 can be more disciplined
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 if they learn in a traditional classroom. When there are
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 to supervise,
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 will pay more attention to the lessons.
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,
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 in a classroom can compete with each other, encouraging
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 to study harder. Not only that, going to school and meeting friends in person often
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 to better friendships
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 improving
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’ mental health.

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planning
Plan before you write. Start with a short intro that shows your view and finish with a clear end.
coherence
Use simple link words to show order and idea, like 'also','but','so' and 'then'.
grammar
Fix small grammar and word form errors (for example: 'There is no fixed schedule', 'thanks to', 'contact professors').
content
Give more clear and real examples for each point, to support ideas.
structure
The essay looks at both sides and uses order words like 'First','Second','Third'.
content
It shows some good ideas about how online learning can help and how school life can help.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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