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The table below shows the percentage of adults in urban and rural areas who took part in four free time activities in 1990 and 2010. Summarize the information and compare where relevant, by selecting and reporting the key features.

The table compares the percentage of adults in cities and
country sides
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countryside
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 who did several leisure
acittivies
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activities
, namely reading, animated play, playing and photography in 1990 and 2010.
Overall
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, reading increased in both
areas
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 and ranked first among all activities and two
areas
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,
while
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 there
were
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was
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 no change in animated play and playing,
respecitvely
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respectively
in
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, in
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 urban and rural
areas
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. With regard to the reading, it stood at 61% and 71% in 1990 in urban and rural
areas
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, respectively.
Then
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 it was
folllowed
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followed
 by a significant rise to 79% in the former and
markedly
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increase
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increased
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 to 79% in the latter, representing the same proportion. Turning to animated play, the share of cities in 1990 was the same as in 2010, accounting for 10%.
By contrast
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, the proportion of rural
areas
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 was 18% in 1990, which was larger than the figure in 2010 by a narrow margin of 4%. In
terma
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terms
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 of
palying
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playing
 in urban
areas
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, it stood at 21%
initially
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, before declining significantly to 14%.
In contrast
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, in rural
areas
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, it
remainded
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remained
 stable with 26%.
Finally
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,
photogtaphy
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photography
 in the former sector accounted for just 7%, which was followed by a dramatic growth to 17%.
Moreover
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,
this
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 figure in the latter
areas
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 was 14%, which
was rise
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rose
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 markedly to 24%.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words areas with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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