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In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?

In the forthcoming years
transportation
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will be provide
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provide
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from
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 technology
and
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 only human
being
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beings
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in
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apply
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the
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inside would be the passengers. In my opinion, that side of development
have
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 more benefits than disadvantages. In
the
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recent
years
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years,
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 the technology
sufficiently
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has grown sufficiently
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grow
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apply
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.
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However
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driverless
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 cars are the real example for that. The
driverless
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 car is a mechanism, which managed by the robot.
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However
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 engineers built
a
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strong mechanical systems in the robots.
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this
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 mechanism
allow
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allows
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 all driver rules and car usage
on
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in
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 a proper way.
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Additionally
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 that kind of transport
methods
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already
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is already
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 popular in
USA
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the USA
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.
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instance
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 as a popular robot company, Tesla
,
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apply
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produce
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produces
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 these cars for
the
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taxi usage. It was a strange experience for delegates
but
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, but
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 locals
already
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were already
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 used to it. As
the
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artificial
intelligent
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 is
get
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to
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 popular in
this
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 generation,
however
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 a new
techonology
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technological
 opportunities are
acceptable
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available
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 in the modern world.
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However
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 I am convinced that in forthcoming most
of
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the
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people
prefer
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will prefer
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 the
driverless
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 car.
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,
driverless
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 cars have
benefits more
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more benefits
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 than disadvantages. Considering that, they are managed by the robot
and
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 it’s
good
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better
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 than an
alchoolic
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alcoholic
 or uneducated driver. In my
view
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view,
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 the only limitation could be the lower ability to make intuitive decisions.
To conclude
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 from my
standpoint
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standpoint,
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 we have to adapt
those
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these
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kind
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kinds
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 of innovations for our future life.
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Additionally
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 those innovations make
easier
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our
life
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lives easier
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task response
State your view clear in the start. Then add 2 or 3 ideas to show why. Use simple facts or examples to back what you say.
coherence
Link your ideas with simple words like and, but, also, for example. Make a clear order: intro, body, end.
grammar
Fix grammar. Use short, clear sent. Watch form of verbs. Example: 'AI is popular now' not 'is get to popular'.
lexical
Use exact facts. The car is not yet in all places. Be careful with claims.
idea
You give a view that driverless cars can be good for all people.
example
You name a real brand (Tesla) to show a point.
Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • driverless vehicles
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
  • increased safety
  • reduced traffic congestion
  • improved efficiency
  • accessibility
  • disabled
  • elderly
  • job displacement
  • privacy concerns
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