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Compared to the past, more people are now studying abroad because it is more convenient and cheaper than before. Do you think this is beneficial to the foreign student’s home country? Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

In contrast
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 to earlier times,international education is now more convenient and less costly,resulting in a growing number of
students
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 studying overseas.In my opinion,studying abroad is one of the most impactful things
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students
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 and their home country for several
of
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reasons.
For example
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,learning new cultures,languages,
hobbies
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,and
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knowledge
 that will support their
countries
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country's
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infrastrucure
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infrastructure
 and economy. To illustrate,
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when
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 foreign
students
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 are introduced to a new
culture
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culture,
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 they will first try to adapt
with
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,
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this
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 will leave them with important soft skills like adaptation,
patients
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patience
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,and
crtical
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critical
 thinking
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be
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have
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 a significant impact
to
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 their
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hometown
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hometown's
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 financial and social life.Regarding the
hobbies
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,in the past
years
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years,
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 a lot of
hobbies
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was
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were
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 introduced by foreign
students
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 to
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thier
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their
hometown
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like
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, like
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,
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soccer,basketball,and
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volleyball
.These
hobbies
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 helped their people to improve
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thier
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their
 health and strength by doing sports. In
addation
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addition
,taking an example
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of
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 countries that
founded
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were founded
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couple
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a couple
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 of years
a
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ago
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ago,
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 they didn't have the science and financial
knowlidge
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knowledge
 that
well developed
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 states have,and that will help foreign
student
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 to develop
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thier knowlidge
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their knowledge
 and experience
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, that
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that
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which
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 will
be
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have
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 a strong effect
to
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 their countries when they move back to
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them
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.When foreign
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student
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students
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 learn a new
language
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language,
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this
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 will help
his
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their
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hometown
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 to increase
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thier
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their
 trading,
invesments
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investments
,and logistics by having
an
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easier communication
skill
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skills
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 that
he
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they
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 studied when
he
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they
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was
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were
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 abroad.
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,studying abroad can be a disadvantage to
foreign
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the foreign
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student
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student's
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hometown
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 if the candidate
wasen't
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responsable
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responsible
to
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for
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 his
action
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actions
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.
For instance
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, if a
student
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 can't manage his time,study,willing to learn,and help his country
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 will leave his
hometown
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 with a huge loss. In conclusion,I think studying abroad is beneficial to foreign
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students
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students'
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hometown
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hometowns
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 because it will improve the
country
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country's
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 financial,social,and
infrastrucure
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infrastructure
life
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apply
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.

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coherence and structure
Use a clear plan. Put one big idea in each paragraph. Start with your view, then give a reason, then end with a short line.
task response
Explain how each example helps the home country. Tie it to the main idea.
language accuracy
Fix spelling and grammar. Use short, simple sentences to be easy to read.
organization
Have one strong opening and a short ending. Make the middle part show how studying abroad can help the home country.
content
You state a clear view on the topic.
organization
Some ideas are given to link the home country with studying abroad.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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