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Band 3.5

One long distance flight consumes fuel which a car uses in several years' time, but they cause the same amount of pollution. So some people think that we should discourage non-essential flights, such as tourist travel, rather than to limit the use of cars. To what extent do you agreeor disagree?

Both
of
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long haul
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long-haul
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flights
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 and using a
car
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in
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for
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 several years period, result in an identical pollution volume. In my opinion, I agree that non-essential
flights
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 should be limited for tourist trips more than
car
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use
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.
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, both must be controlled and limited. The
long distance
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long-distance
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flights
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, does not only
consumes
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consume
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 fuel
which
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, which
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 causes pollution,
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but it's
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they's
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it's
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it are
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also
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 costly in the airline industry
due to
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 the long flight journey. Individuals or families should start
reduce using
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reducing their use of
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plane
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planes
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 as the main transportation mothed of
touism
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tourism
.
Other
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 alternative is
traveling
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travelling
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 via trains can be more suitable and better for the
enviroment
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environment
. It's
also
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 interesting and more
enjoable
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enjoyable
and
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, and
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 people should be
encoureged
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encouraged
 to
use
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 trains more often if the option
existes
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exists
 and rely on it.
On the other hand
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, reducing the
use
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 of cars can
also
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 be a friendly solution to the
enviroment
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environment
. But cars
is
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are
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 the main
trasportaion
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transportation
 method in our life
and
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, and
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it's
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they're
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 used
alot
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a lot
 as a daily
use
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 for work, school, visiting family, shopping and many other activities.
However
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, we may replace cars utilizing other alternatives
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such
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public
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as public
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 transportation
if
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 available,
for
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example
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example,
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 trains, buses and bikes and if there are any other options that could help and support the idea of limiting
the
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apply
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car
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use
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.
To conclude
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, both
long haul
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long-haul
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flights
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 and
car
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use
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 should be limited for unnecessary reasons, and people might try other options that can be helpful and a fast solution to reduce
the
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apply
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pollution.

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overall
Your answer shows a view but it is not strong. Make a clear plan in the intro and a strong end. Use a few clear ideas and keep to one idea per paragraph.
task
Task response: State your view at the start. Give two main reasons and an example for each. Explain why non-essential flights should be cut more than car use.
coherence
Coherence and cohesion: Use clear links between lines. Put ideas in two body parts: one on flights, one on cars. Use simple linking words like first, also, but, however, and finally.
task response
You show a view on the issue.
coherence
You mention options like trains and buses as better options.
Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • essential
  • travel
  • flight
  • plane
  • car
  • fuel
  • use
  • limit
  • reduce
  • non-essential
  • tourist
  • train
  • rail
  • bus
  • public
  • transport
  • policy
  • plan
  • tax
  • cost
  • save
  • energy
  • future
  • air
  • air quality
  • world
  • people
  • life
  • work
  • home
  • school
  • trip
  • route
  • option
  • alternative
  • electric
  • green
  • clean
  • harm
  • effect
  • change
  • remote
  • video
  • meetings
  • money
  • money
  • support
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