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The bar graph below shows the stock price of four different technology companies from 2011 to 2016. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows the
stock
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 prices for
Apple
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,
Facebook
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, Yahoo and
google
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Google
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 between 2011 to 2016.
Overall
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,
Apple
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 went up and down during the period.
However
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, in
2012
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2012,
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Apple
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Apple's
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stock
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 price
has
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apply
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skyrocketed.
Facebook
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 had
notable
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a notable
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 steady
incraese
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increase
 in the years
and
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, and
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 Yahoo kept on declining. Google was the lowest and stayed the same
throughtout
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throughout
 the years.
Apple
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 in 2011 was at almost 5000
but
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, but
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it is
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its
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stock
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prices
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price
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 went up eight times higher the next year
with
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, with
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 over 30000 by a lot.
but
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But
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 in
2013
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2013,
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 the
stock
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 prices had
big
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a big
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 drop to slightly over 5000. In 2014 and 2015
and
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, and
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2016
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2016,
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 it went up and down with no big change. Google had
trading
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a trading
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 price almost equal to 0
and
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, and
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it is
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its
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 price never changed during the period.
Facebook
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 had
steady
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a steady
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 increase from over 5000 in 2011 to 20000 in 2016
which
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, which
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 was tripled. Yahoo in 2011 was equal to
Facebook
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but
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, but
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 it had fallen each year in
reached
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reach
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 near 0 in 2016.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words stock, apple, facebook with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "went up" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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