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Band 3.5

Wild nature nowadays needs conservation. To which extend do you agree or disagree?

In the modern world, it is
deniable
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 that
,
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wild life
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wildlife
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 is getting extinct day by day, because of which it is the responsibility of humans to conserve Wild nature. I agree with
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 statement
and
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, and
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 the reason
of
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this
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 notion will be discussed in
upcoming
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the upcoming
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 paragraphs. One of the most important
concern
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concerns
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 is that
,
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 wild
animals
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 are getting extinct. To elaborate
it
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,
Natural
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the Natural
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 ecosystem is getting disrupted because of the imbalance in
natural
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the natural
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 habitat, as there are some species which are disappearing because of
humans
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humans'
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 disrespectful behaviour towards nature, leading to multiple problems
such
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 as Global warming.
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,
Tiger
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the Tiger
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 is the national animal of India.
However
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, recent research shows that only 1400 Tigers
are remained
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remain
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.
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,
upcoming
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the upcoming
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 generation will not be able to see them.
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, branded companies are making expensive products in which they are using
the
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skin of
animals
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. To
examplify
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exemplify
 it, creatures are killed for the purpose of making costly goods.
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, designer bags are manufactured
while
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 using
skin
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the skin
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 of
animals
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such
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Tiger
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tigers
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, Snakes and Crocodiles.
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, it is very important to protect
there
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their
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 life, because it will disturb the natural cycle. In conclusion, it is evident that it is important to save
wild life
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wildlife
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 as they are less in number, and in
future
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 our next generation
would
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will
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 not be able to witness the advantages of wild
animals
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. I have personally
came
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come
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 to believe that the need
of
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 conservation is very important.

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structure
Plan your writing: intro, two main ideas, and a short ending.
grammar
Check word use and grammar; fix 'wild life' to 'wildlife' and 'their life' to 'their lives'.
content
Use facts that are easy to check and keep one idea per sentence to be clear.
coherence
Use linking words to show how ideas are tied (First, Also, Because, So).
content
The writer shows a clear view that wild nature should be kept safe.
content
Two reasons are given: animals in danger and skin use in goods.
structure
There is a short end that repeats the view.
Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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