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Band 4

Wild nature nowadays needs conservation. To which extend do you agree or disagree

In the modern world, it is undeniable that wildlife is
getting
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 extinct day by day, because of which it is the responsibility of humans to conserve Wild nature. I agree with
this
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 statement, and the reason for
this
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 notion will be discussed in the upcoming paragraphs. One of the most important concerns is that
,
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 wild
animals
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 are getting extinct. To elaborate, the natural ecosystem is getting disrupted because of the imbalance in the natural habitat, as there are some species which are disappearing because of
human's
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humans'
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 disrespectful behaviour towards nature, leading to multiple problems
such
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 as Global warming.
For instance
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, The Tiger is the national animal of India.
However
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, recent research shows that only 1400 Tigers remain.
As a result
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, the upcoming generation will not be able to see them.
Moreover
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, branded companies are making expensive products in which they are using the skin of
animals
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. To exemplify, creatures are killed for the purpose of making costly goods.
For example
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, designer bags are manufactured
while
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 using the skin of
animals
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such
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 as
tiger
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tigers
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, snakes, and crocodiles.
Therefore
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, it is very important to protect
there
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their
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 life, because it will disturb the natural cycle. In conclusion, it is evident that it is important to save wildlife as they are less in number, and in
future
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future,
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 our next generation
would
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will
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 not be able to witness the advantages of wild
animals
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. I have personally
came
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come
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 to believe that the need
of
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for
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 conservation is very important.

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task response
Plan your essay. State your view at the start. Then give 2-3 reasons and a short example for each.
coherence
Make the flow clear. Use linking words like also, because, for example to join ideas.
grammar
Fix big mistakes in grammar. Watch use of their/there/they and plural forms.
content
Be care ful with facts. The tiger numbers or facts should be correct and can be checked.
conclusion
End with a strong line. Do not add new ideas in the end.
lexis
Use simple words. Do not use big words just to show style.
strength
A clear view on the topic.
content
Use of examples about tigers and skins.
Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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