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The table compares data about underground railway systems in six main cities including the date opened,route length in kilometers, and passenger numbers in millions.

The table compares data about underground railway systems in six main cities including the date opened,route length in kilometers, and passenger numbers in millions.
The table compares data about underground
railway
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systems
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 in six main cities
including
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 the date opened,route length in
kilometers
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kilometres
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, and passenger numbers in millions.
Firstly
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, it is clear from the table that
London
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's route was the longest compared to the other cities,
while
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Kyoto
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’s was the shortest. The older
systems
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 in
London
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, Paris, and
Tokyo
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 are significantly larger and more heavily used than the modern
systems
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 in
Kyoto
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, Los Angeles, and Washington
DC
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, DC
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. The three oldest
railway
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systems
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 were in
London
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, Paris, and
Tokyo
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.
London
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 has the oldest and longest
system
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, covering 394
kilometers
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kilometres
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, but it carries fewer
passengers
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 than
Tokyo
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which
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, which
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 transports 1928
million
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passengers
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 per
year
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. Paris is the
second opened
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second-oldest
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 underground
railway
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system
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. Its
railway
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line
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 is the second longest
line
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which
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, which
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 covers 199
kilometers
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kilometres
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, and
this
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railway
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system
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 carries 1191
million
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passengers
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 per
year
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. In terms of the
Tokyo
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railway
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system
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, it is the
last
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 of the three oldest
railway
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systems
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.
On the other hand
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, the three most modern
systems
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 were in Washington
DC
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, DC
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,
Kyoto
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, and Los Angeles. The Washington
DC
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, DC
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railway
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system
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 opened in 1976, and it transports around 144
million
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passengers
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 per
year
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.
This
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railway
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system
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 is the longest
line
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 which
covers
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covering
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 126 kilometres, among the modern
systems
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. In terms of the
Kyoto
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railway
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system
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, it opened in 1981.
This
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railway
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system
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 has an
11 kilometer
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11-kilometre
line
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which
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, which
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 is the shortest compared to other countries.
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, the Los Angeles
railway
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system
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 opened after the
Kyoto
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railway
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system
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 in 2001,
it
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 transports more
passengers
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 than
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Kyoto
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the Kyoto
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railway
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around
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, around
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 50
million
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 people per
year
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.
Finally
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, it has a
28 kilometre
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28-kilometre
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 route.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words railway, systems, london, tokyo, kyoto, system, passengers, million, year, line with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "compares" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "data" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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