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In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

It is often argued that printed
newspapers
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 or
books
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 will not be preferred because the Internet enables
people
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 to read everything without buying. From my perspective, it seems
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absurd because of
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 to equality in
information
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 and one's preferences.
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 with, admittedly, some
people
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 believe that paper-based
newspapers
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 and
books
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 will disappear. It is mainly because the development of technologies allows
people
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 to
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online
newspapers
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 and e-
books
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 for free.
In other words
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, time and location constraints no longer exist.
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, the number of sales in paper-based
newspapers
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 and
books
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 will decrease.
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, I strongly believe that printed
newspapers
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 and
books
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 will not disappear, even though the number of
people
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 who prefer these will drop. In reality, online news and e-
books
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 are not preferred by the elderly
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 physical difficulty. They are experiencing ageing;
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, old
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 have eyesight problems.
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, I am convinced that paper-based
newspapers
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 and
books
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 will exist in the future.
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 is mainly because schools and libraries want to subscribe for educational purposes and for
access
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 to equality in
information
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. In other words, low-income household would not enable their kids to have smartphones or have
access
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 to the Internet. So, they would prefer to see printed
newspapers
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 and
books
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 in libraries.
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, paper can give its own texture, which
people
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make
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 creative.
According to
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 some research, when
people
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 flick pages for even a
second,
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the brain will imagine what the content of the next page is, so it is helpful for creativity. In conclusion, paper-based
newspapers
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 and
books
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 will remain one of the strongest methods to deliver
information
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 to low-income households.
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, it guarantees
access
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 to equality in
information
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.
Therefore
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, printed
newspapers
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 and
books
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 will exist in the future.

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task response
State a clear view in the opening line and keep it in all paragraphs.
task response
Give clear and specific examples to back each point.
language
Use simple words and short sentences; check for grammar errors.
coherence
Link ideas with easy connectors; make the flow logical.
positioning
Has a view on the topic.
coherence
Uses signpost words like in addition and furthermore.
ideas
Gives some reasons for and against.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • convenience
  • cost-effective
  • cultural value
  • sentimental value
  • reliability
  • distracting
  • access to
  • digital devices
  • internet
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