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Nowadays,many people choose to be self employed rather than work for a company or organization. Why might this be the case? What could be the disadvantages.

There is no doubt that recently many
people
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self employed
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 rather than working for someone else. The question is, what are the advantages and disadvantages of being your own boss?
This
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people
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 like to be
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self emplyed
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self-employed
 and
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the disadvantages of that. In
term
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 of the recent trend of being
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self employed
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. The main point given to support
this
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 preference is that you will have flexibility in your working hours and place. To illustrate,
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having
 your own business or
work
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 will allow you to choose the exact time when you
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as well as
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 being able to
work
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 from your
convienient
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convenient
 location.
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Self emploed
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Self-employed
 have the
previlage
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privilege
 to
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 from home
or
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 some might prefer to have a working office. In
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 no restrictions on specific checking in and checking out time or working on site.
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, there are some disadvantages of being
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self employed
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.
Firstly
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, commitment. Many
people
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 find it
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difficult
 to be productive without
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 leader and rules to follow.
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, overcoming failure. As a matter of fact, one of the most critical
opsticals
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aspects
 of running your own business is being able to recover after facing a crisis.
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 to say, in big
organizations
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organisations
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 or
companies
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companies,
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 many
people
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 hold account for a mistake
commited
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committed
.
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, they are more likely to
reciver
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receive
 quickly.
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, many
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self
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 employers stop working immediately. In
another
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colleages
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colleagues
 and an employer will decrease the
work
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 effort needed.
To sum up
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, it is evident that
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numerous
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people
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 prefer to be their own boss , but there are still some challenges of
beng
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being
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self employed
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.
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Self employed
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people
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 have to ensure to learn how to be leaders and
to have
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 patient to be able to
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succeed
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 in the future.

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language
Fix spelling and grammar. Use short, clear sentences. Check words like 'self employed', 'convenient', 'privilege'.
structure
Use a simple plan: one paragraph for why people choose self employment, one for problems, plus a short intro and a simple conclusion.
content
Give clear examples for each reason and for the problems. Stay on topic from start to end.
content
The essay tries to discuss both sides of the topic.
structure
There is an introduction and a conclusion.
coherence
Some linking words show ideas connect.
Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • flexibility
  • freedom
  • pursue
  • passion
  • interest
  • income
  • financial success
  • control
  • working hours
  • work-life balance
  • empowerment
  • ownership
  • job security
  • stability
  • financial challenges
  • isolation
  • social interaction
  • self-discipline
  • motivation
  • deadlines
  • supervisors
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