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The internet has made possible for everybody to read anything online for free. This will make it unnecessary to pay for printed materials such as books or newspapers in the future. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

In the modern world, it is undeniable that
while
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 using the
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 person can easily excess free reading sources.
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, in the
future
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 it is chance that people will not be willing to purchase
books
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 and newspapers. I firmly believe that
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 increase
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effect
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 it at a huge level. The reason
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paragraphs. One of the most important
reason
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reasons
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of
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this
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 trend is the easy approach, as using our gadgets
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phone
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phones
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apply
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 and laptops, one can easily find the study material online and gain
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knowledge about any topic, which saves a
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 of time
to
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 go library or
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books
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.
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, students can attend the online classes from the comfort of their home
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 using online platforms
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.
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Moreover
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, breaking news
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also
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 podcast on online applications, because of which there is no need to use
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newspapers
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newspapers,
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 as one can easily read news on their phone
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On the other hand
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, there are
also
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 some drawbacks
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to
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 using the
internet
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 a
lot
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 can be dependent on the
internet
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. To
eleborate
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elaborate
, using
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internet
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the internet
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 and
artifical intelligance
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artificial intelligence
 a
lot
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 can
effect
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 the
decison making
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decision-making
 skills and critical thinking of users
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For example
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, students
nowdays
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nowadays
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 prefer to make
there
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their
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assignment
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assignments
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 and presentations
while
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 using AI,
beacuse
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because
 of which
thier
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their
 own creativity is lacking.
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, more screen time can
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person's
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a person's
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 eyesight and
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lead
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 to mental
heath
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health
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 disturbance.
Thus
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,
totaly
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totally
 cutting off
books
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 and paper sources can
impact
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have
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 a
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lot
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significant impact
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 on
person's
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a person's
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 health condition.
To conclude
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,
although
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internet
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the internet
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have
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has
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 made everything so easy and convenient to function.
However
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, the drawbacks of being
totaly
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totally
dependant
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 on
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internet
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the internet
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 overpowers the importance of using
books
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 and newspapers.

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task response
State your view clearly in the first paragraph and keep it through the essay.
task response
Add a more strong point and end with a clear restatement of your view.
coherence and cohesion
Use sign posts to show how ideas flow. Plan before you write.
coherence and cohesion
Use short sentences and clear link words like first, then, also, but, for example, in conclusion.
content
The idea of your view is clear.
example
You give real life examples such as online classes and news on phone.
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