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You are going to another country to study. You would like to do a part-time job while you are studying, so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help. Write a letter to this friend. In your letter • give details of your study plans • explain why you want to get a part-time job • suggest how your friend could help you find a job

Dear Nick, I hope you are doing great! As you know, I have been admitted to Erasmus University of Rotterdam for 1 year. I am planning to come 3 months earlier to adapt more quickly to my new routine and may find a part-time job.
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 the tuition fee is already funded, I am going to need some extra income for my other expenses because I don't want to be a burden
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 my family anymore. Apart from money, working abroad is beneficial in many ways
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socializing
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 and networking with other people.
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, I would be grateful if you could help me find a job, since you have been working there for the past 5 years.
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, you can text me back a list of local stores which hire foreign students or recommend me to some employers that you know. See you soon and take care. Your friend, Lykourgos

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structure
Split ideas into three short parts; keep each part about one main idea.
content
Say how the money will be used, for things like rent and travel.
practical
Ask Nick to name places that hire students or to make a quick intro to a boss.
language
Use simple words and short sentences to keep the tone clear.
content
Clear plan to study and move date is given.
tone
Polite and friendly tone throughout the letter.
structure
Requests for help are clear and easy to follow.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Educational aspirations
  • Work experience
  • Financial independence
  • Resume (or CV)
  • Local job market
  • International student
  • Legal requirements
  • Student work permit
  • Employment trends
  • Time management
  • Networking
  • A part-time position
  • Balance studies and work
  • Job hunting strategies
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