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The chart below shows the percentage of households in three countries (Italy, Spain and Sweden) that had internet access between 2000 and 2020.

The chart below shows the percentage of households in three countries (Italy, Spain and Sweden) that had internet access between 2000 and 2020.
The chart provides information about the
percentage
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 of households in Italy, Spain and
Sweden
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 with
internet
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 access between the year of 2000 and 2020.
Overall
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,
according to
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 the data, every country registered a surge in 20 years
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 Italy and Spain grew by 60%,
while
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Sweden
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’s
percentage
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 of increase is slightly lower (55%). In 2000, Italy and Spain’s
Internet
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 availability was 20% and 25% respectively, differently from
Sweden
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, which reached several of 40% of connected households. By 2010, the figures had changed dramatically. Italy and Spain went through the same increase of 35% from 2000.
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,
Sweden
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 climbed up to 45%, 15% more than the other countries. By the year 2020, all of them had peaked considerably. Italy’s number of households with
internet
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 access rose to 80%,
while
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 Spain’s recorded 85%. The highest
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 of people with
internet
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 in their homes is in
Sweden
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, with a
percentage
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 of 95%. Even though
Sweden
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’s growth is
lightly
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 lower than other countries, it still has the most extensive access to in
Internet
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, sweden, internet with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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