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The chart below shows the results of a survey about people\'s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart depicts the results of a questionnaire related to
coffee
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 and tea buying and drinking routines in five distinct
cities
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 in Australia (Sydney, Melbourne,
Brisban
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Brisbane
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, Adelaide and Hobart) for the
last
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 month. The units are measured in percentages. Looking from an
overall
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 perspective, it is evident that buying fresh
coffee
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 was the least popular option in all of the
cities
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,
while
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 a
coffee
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 or tea break in a cafe prevailed in all of the
cities
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 except for
Adelaide
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Adelaide,
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 where instant
coffee
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 was bought more (
although
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 the data for
this
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 category did not vary much from
a
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apply
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city
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 to
city
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). Analysis shows that fresh
coffee
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 was the least
favorable
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favourable
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 option for the respondents in every
city
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, starting from approximately 32% and going up to about 42%. A deeper examination reveals that people had almost an equal tendency to buy instant
coffee
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;
however
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, individuals in
Brisban
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Brisbane
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 and Hobart used
this
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 method more than people in the remaining
cities
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, being approximately 53% in these two
cities
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, and just a little less in others (varying from just over 40% to about 53%). It is
also
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 noteworthy that representatives in Melbourne and Hobart drank more than in any other
city
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,
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;
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 they chose a
coffee
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/tea break (over 60%) more.
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, there was only one
city
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 where people opted for buying an instant
coffee
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 over having some in a cafe (Adelaide
with
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, with
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 just below 40%).

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Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, cities, city with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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