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Band 3

The plans below show the site of an airport now and how it will look after redevelopment next year. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The plans depict the Southwest airport now and after some renovations the following year. Looking from an
overall
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 perspective, today, the airport will be enlarged, and it will
also
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 experience some significant alterations in terms of departments. The main feature is that the number of gates will increase from 8 to 18.
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, some shops,
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a
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bag drop,
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an
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ATM, and a car hire station will be added. On the
contary
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contrary
, the
walways
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walk
 will
be
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always be
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 altered with sky trains. Analysis reveals that the number of departure and arrival doors will be increased to two for both.
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,
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the
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departures sector consists of
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the
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check-in department and a cafe,
whereas
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 in a
year
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year,
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 a bag drop will be added to
this
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 area,
although
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 the
check in
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check-in
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 area will be replaced with the bag drop one in the west, and a cafe will be replaced just to the left of the entrance. The territory of the security and passport control will be the same, just
further
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 the two main sectors.
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, after these
government related
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 agencies
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some shops
in
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on
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 the side of the departures will be built. As the number of gates will be changed, walkways will be replaced with two sky trains. The closer examination illustrates that
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the
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arrivals area is
empry
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empty
, but it will be
reenforced
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reinforced
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 with a cafe in the top right corner, an ATM near it and a car hire spot in the south-east.

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structure
Use a clear plan. Start with a short view of now and later, then add each change in your own order.
language
Fix hard spell and rule to be easy to read. Use you plan words that are simple and fix errors like 'walways' and 'empry'.
coherence
Make one idea per line and keep a small link word to join ideas. Use time words like now, next, after, then.
content
You show the main change of gates (8 to 18).
structure
You split the plan into now and after, which helps reading.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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