The maps show part of the town of Poulton in 1900 and 1935. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams illustrate part of the
town
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of Poulton between 1900 and 1935.
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, the
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expanded significantly through the construction of new buildings and developed in terms of recreational, residential and commercial facilities,
while
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industrial areas were replaced over the
period
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Firstly
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, the
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of Poulton changed in several ways
particularly
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in terms of residential and commercial facilities. To illustrate, the factory was completely demolished from the diagram
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a range of residential buildings were built to the north of the
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.
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, Terraced houses were converted to flats to the west of the diagram. The wasteland was removed to the north of the map in 1935.
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, the laundry was relocated to the north-east of the map
along
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the
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Furthermore
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, houses on the side of the road disappeared on the diagram
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the number of shops increased and relocated to the south-eastern
of
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the
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in 1935.
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, the cafe was relocated to the other side of
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Bayley Street in 1935.
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, a new street called New Lane was constructed
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the south-eastern side of the
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during the time
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. Meanwhile, the
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developed in terms of recreational
area
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while
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,
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industrial areas were removed during the 35 years.
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,
railway
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the railway
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line,
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the railway
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workers
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cottages and the wasteland were demolished in the south of
town
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in 1935. The Bayley
street
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park and children’s play area were built during the
period
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words town, period with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "diagrams" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "illustrate" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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