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The bar chart illustrates car sales of 3 various manufacturers, namely Toyota, Ford, Honda in North America, Europe, Asia in 2023.

The bar chart illustrates car
sales
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 of 3 various manufacturers, namely
Toyota
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, Ford,
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Honda
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and Honda
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in
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, in
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 North America, Europe,
Asia
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and Asia
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 in 2023.
Highest
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The highest
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 figure of
sales
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were
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was
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 in
the
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apply
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North America
which
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, which
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 was the leading country.
Toyota
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 was higher than Ford, representing 500
thousands
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thousand
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of
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apply
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vehicle
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vehicles
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, meanwhile
Honda
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 was marginally lower compared with
Toyota
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 accounted for 300 thousand modes of transport in
this
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 region. Asia
also
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show
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shows
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 a similar pattern with North
Amarica
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America
.
Toyota
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 was by far the highest
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in
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, in
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 contrast with
Honda
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 stood
250
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at 250
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 thousand
of
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units of
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 transport in
this
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 country. The least significant group with car
sales
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 by manufacturers was Europe. The lowest proportion
made
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was made
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 up
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Honda
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by Honda
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which
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, which
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 was lower than
Toyota
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, which topped the list
approximately
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with approximately
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 300 thousand vehicles.
Overall
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, the lion’s share of transport
sales
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 region was
Nort
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North
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Amarica
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America
 in each
mark
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market
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 of modes, and Europe showed comparatively weaker for all
manufactures
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manufacturers
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sales, toyota, honda with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "illustrates" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
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