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The graph below shows the population figures for different types of turtles in India from 1980 to 2012.

The line graph
illustrate
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illustrates
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 the population of types of
turtles
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Leatherback
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, Leatherback
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, Green, Olive
ridley
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Ridley
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 and all species in total in
india
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India
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 from the years 1980
till
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to
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 2012.
Linking Words
overall
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Overall
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, all the
turtles
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 started at the same
palce
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place
 at 100
but
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, but
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 changed
at the end
Linking Words
the
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. The
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 olive ridley reached the highest population amongst other
turtles
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, unlike the leatherback
which
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, which
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 reached the lowest.
in
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In
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 terms of olive ridley
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turtles
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turtles,
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 they peaked in the year 2012 at almost 135,
while
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 the other species came close second at nearly 105.
Linking Words
on
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On
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 the other hand, the leatherback
turtles
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 were the lowest of them all
at the end
Linking Words
at
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, at
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 almost 55, not like the green
turtles
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, who
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who
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which
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 peaked at almost 110 but
at the end
Linking Words
droped
Correct your spelling
dropped
 to under 90.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "at the end".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words turtles with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
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