The graph below shows the population figures for different types of turtles in India from 1980 to 2012.

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illustrates
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the population of types of
turtles
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Leatherback
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, Leatherback
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, Green, Olive
ridley
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Ridley
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and all species in total in
india
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India
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from the years 1980
till
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to
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2012.
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overall
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, all the
turtles
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started at the same
palce
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place
at 100
but
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, but
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changed
at the end
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the
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. The
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olive ridley reached the highest population amongst other
turtles
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, unlike the leatherback
which
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, which
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reached the lowest.
in
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terms of olive ridley
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turtles
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turtles,
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they peaked in the year 2012 at almost 135,
while
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the other species came close second at nearly 105.
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on
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the other hand, the leatherback
turtles
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were the lowest of them all
at the end
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at
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almost 55, not like the green
turtles
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who
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peaked at almost 110 but
at the end
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droped
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dropped
to under 90.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "at the end".
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words turtles with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
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