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The pie charts show the amount of money that a children’s charity located in the USA spent and received in one year, 2016. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The pie charts show the
number
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amount
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 of money that children's charity spent and received during 2016 in the USA.
Overall
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, donated food was the highest in Revenue sources.
While
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,
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apply
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 Program Services represented the biggest in Expenditures. In Revenue Sources, the biggest rate was donated food at 86%.
This
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 accounted for well over half of the total.
This
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followed
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was followed
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 by Community Contributions,
peaked
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which peaked
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 at ten
percent
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per cent
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. Next is Program
Revenue
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Revenue,
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 represented at 2.2%.
While
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,
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apply
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 Other Income stood at 0.4. The two smallest categories were Investment income and Government Grants,
accounted
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which accounted
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 for 0.2%.
On the other hand
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, In Expenditures, Program Services accounted for the largest share in the category. with the figure 95%.
This
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 took over half of the total expenses.
Whereas
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,
Fundrasing
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Fundraising
 mude up only 2.6%.
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by
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By
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 contrast, Management and General stood at 1.4
percent
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per cent
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which
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, which
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 is the lowest figure in the category.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 73%.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "represented" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 2 times.
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