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The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007, 2011 and 2015. summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007, 2011 and 2015. summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar graph displays the number of
households
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 in the United States of America based on their yearly income in 2007, 2011 and 2015.
Overall
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, from the 5 different annual earnings,
households
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earned
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that earned
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 more than $100k annually increased by 2015. Those who made between $50k to $75k and $75k-$100k showed an identical figure throughout the period,
while
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 the other 2 bars, less than $25k and $25k-$50k, presented a steady fluctuation.
To begin
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, it was obvious that American
households
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 making $100k or more annual salary
was
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were
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 the highest in 2007, at nearly 30
million
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households
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, the
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. The
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 trend
then
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 was going down slightly to around 27
million
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 in 2011, but it climbed up significantly in the next three years to over 33
million
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.
On the other hand
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,
households
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 earning $50k to $75k and $75k-$100k illustrated a very small difference over the 8-year period, where merely around 20 to 23
million
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households
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 and 14 to 15
million
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households
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, respectively.
In contrast
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,
other
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the other
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 2 bars with annual income less than $25k, $25k-$50k experienced a fluctuating trend. In 2007, there were 25
million
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households
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 making less than 25
million
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 dollars
,
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;
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 the number increased in 2011 to almost 30
million
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, but declined slightly to around 27
million
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 in the next 3 years.
Similarly
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, there were approximately 26 mil
households
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 making $25k-$50k in 2017, and the number increased
4
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by 4
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million
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 in 2011 before dropping a little to 29
million
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 in 2015.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words households, k, k-, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • household
  • income distribution
  • income brackets
  • annual income
  • significant growth
  • decline
  • comparative analysis
  • trends
  • disparity
  • shift
  • socio-economic factors
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