The charts below show the percentage of time working adults spent on different activities in a particular country in 1958 and 2008.

The two charts delineate six different routines that adult groups spent their
time
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daily
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on daily
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between 1958 and 2008 in a specific country. In general, people had
their
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apply
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most
time
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to
sleeping
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sleep
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and
working
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work
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,
while
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their
time
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to travelling
took
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was
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a
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apply
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brief
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time
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in 1958.
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, their
time
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management changes noticeably in 2008, which is working more
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and followed
with
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by
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significant
decreasing
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decreases
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and
increasing
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in particular
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routines. Taking a closer look at the first diagram, in 1958,
it is clear that
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sleeping and working received a considerable proportion of people to prioritise, forming just over a third. It was followed by going out with nearly a fifth. Meanwhile, three other categories
were
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the lowest proportion, making up merely 2%-8% in the same period. Moving onto the second diagram, after 50 years, people evolved their routines, which
was
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working increased just over 40%. Some features
also
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rose significantly, travelling to
office
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the office
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and relaxing at home jumped by a margin of 6% and 5%, respectively.
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, sleeping still exhibited a remarkable portion,
although
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it went down to a quarter by 2008. Going out,
by contrast
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, had a drastic decline of a third
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,
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other
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groups
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maintained the same level.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words time with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "diagram" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "just over" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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