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Band 3

Write a complete essay in response to the question. Some people think that tourism benefits the host country. Others think that tourism causes problems for the host country. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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 there have been different points of view around the world regarding the positive or negative impact of tourism on the host community. Some people believe that tourists bring many
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 aspects,
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 others think that they disturb the daily life of local residents.
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Moreover
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 if a city becomes
touristic
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touristy
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, prices will increase, worsening people's purchasing power and raising the cost of
life
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living
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. In
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 there are several positive impacts of tourism on cities: development of infrastructure, support of local shops, preservation of historical sites and, as we have seen, economic growth.
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contrast
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 there could be environmental damage, loss of local identity, overcrowding and seasonal economy (many jobs depend only on
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tourism
 and they are not stable).
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, as with everything, citizens and governments should find the right balance between the tourism influence and the well-being of the host community.
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 there are many outskirts where people could live near the big
touristic
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tourist
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 cities if they prefer a quiet life.

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Task response
Begin with a clear view in the first paragraph and keep a short plan in your own words.
Task response
Add more details to each idea with small examples to show proof.
Coherence
Use connecting words to show how ideas relate, like 'also', 'but', 'however', 'for this reason'.
Grammar
Check grammar and spell words correctly; the phrase 'touristic' is not used well.
Structure
Make a new paragraph for each idea and keep order simple.
Content
The essay shows two sides of the topic.
Conclusion
You give a clear ending with a balance.
Coherence
Some good linking between ideas.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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