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Writing Samples
Band 4.5

You were going to start a job next month, but you will not be able to. Write a letter to your future employer. In your letter: Explain the situation Describe your problem Tell him or her when you can start work

Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing
this
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 letter to inform you that I am unable to start a job in your office as scheduled next week.
Last
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 week, I attended my cousin's party, which was
organied
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organised
 in a hotel. Unfortunately,
while
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 on the way back home, I met with an accident. My car hit a tree, and I got some serious injuries. One of my arms has not only a small
frature
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fracture
, but I am
also
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 not able
talk
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to talk
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 because of
leg
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a leg
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 injury.
Moreover
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, I recently
dischared
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discharged
 from the hospital, and the doctor advised me to avoid
walk
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walking
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 independently.
Furthermore
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, I cannot do work with my left
arms
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arm
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 because of
minor
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a minor
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 fracture. I am hoping that I
would be
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will
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recovered
Wrong verb form
recover
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 within a month. I would appreciate
you
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it
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 if you could extend my joining date. Please accept my sincere apology for not being able to join on 2nd March. I am looking forward to your positive consideration. Yours
Sincerely
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sincerely
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, Rupinder Kaur.

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coherence
The letter is all in one line with many ideas. Try to split into two or three short paragraphs.
coherence
State why you cannot join first, then explain the problem, then say when you can start. This keeps order clear.
task response
Be clear on the exact date you can start, e.g. 'I can start from 15 April' rather than a rough time.
task response
Check spell and grammar, for example 'organised'/'discharged' and 'arm' vs 'arms' and 'talk'.
tone
The letter uses a polite tone with Dear Sir/Madam and Yours sincerely.
content
It tells the reason and a possible date to start.
structure
The form is formal and respectful.
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