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Some people believe that to become successful at a sport requires a natural ability, others think that hardwork and practice are more important. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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 sports, it is controversial whether success comes from a natural ability or
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hard work
 and
practice
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. Even though it is widely perceived that
talant
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talent
 is the most important factor, I strongly believe that
hardwork
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hard work
 is the most vital factor. Having natural ability is
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essential. Especially in the case of sports, to be successful, physical talent,
such
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 as balance, fast
reflected
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 reaction and
flexability
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flexibility
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matter
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matters
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. When I was an
athelete
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athlete
, players who had great
flexability
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flexibility
 could save
significant
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 amount of time,
when
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 others
stuggled
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struggled
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stretching
. In that regard, it is notable that having
talant
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talent
 is an advantage.
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, I believe it is not essential. There were many cases
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 in which some
poeple
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people
 worked hard to get to the top .
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, there was a friend of mine who was considered to lack physical talent.
On
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 day, she began to
practice
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 twice as much as everyone else. After almost 2 years, she began to earn top scores, which led me to believe that resilience is much more vital than natural talents. Even though there are many
paper
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 that say talent cannot be overcome by
practice
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, in my experience,
atheletes
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athletes
 who
had
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 a reputation
of
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 working hard
,
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 always turn out to be the top
athelets
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athletes
. Talents can be seen
first,
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but in the long term, I believe resilience or spending time on
practice
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 is the most important factor.

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grammar
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Add one or two clear examples that match your point and show how you think.
structure
Use more linking words to move from one idea to the next so the essay reads smoothly.
content
You show a clear view and give reason for your choice.
structure
You talk about both sides of the issue.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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