You are planning a holiday and want to find out about the kinds of holiday packages that can be arranged by a local company. Write a letter to the company to as for information about the holiday packages they offer. In your letter: say where and when you would like to go include details about the kind of holiday you would like to take say what kind of information you would like to receive.

Dear Mam, Sir I am writing
this
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letter to get information about the latest vacation packages you offered by your tour and travel company. Next month is my husband's birthday, and I want to surprise him with a holiday trip to Bali. I want to book packages for 2, and looking for something around 1st April for about 15 days.
Moreover
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, can you give more details about what else will be included in the plan,
such
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as tickets, hotel bookings,
tour
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a tour
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guide, and travel expenses
.
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?
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I have heard Bali is a very peaceful place to visit, so it would be a good option for my partner to travel, as it will give him
break
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a break
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from his busy work schedule
,
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.
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We would like to spend about a week in beach view villas and another week for more tourist places,
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as Bali swings, exploring temples, and parks. It would be appreciated if you
can
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could
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also
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arrange a rental car for us to use during our vacation. You can reply
on
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to
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this
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email with the packages you can offer
according to
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our trip vision
,
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.
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I will look forward to
hear
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hearing
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from you soon. Yours
faithfuly
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faithfully
, Yasmein

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improvement
Put your goal at the start.
structure
Use 3 short parts: start, middle, end.
structure
One idea per paragraph.
language
Fix small errors like 'Dear Sir or Madam' and 'faithfully'.
strength
The ask is clear: info about holiday packages.
strength
Polite tone.
strength
Gives dates and number of people.
The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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