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4. (Bình) To improve the quality of education, some people think that we should encourage our students to educate and criticize their teachers. Others believe that will result in loss of respect and discipline in the classroom. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

Some people believe that
students
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 should be encouraged to evaluate and criticise their
teachers
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 in order to improve the quality of education.
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, another group of people
convinced
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is convinced
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 that it may cause loss of respect and discipline.His essay will discuss both perspectives and explain why I believe that constructive feedback from
students
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 can be beneficial for the educational process.
Firstly
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,
teachers
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 are the same people as all we are.And it is normal to be wrong sometimes.They aren'
t
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 supercomputers and can'
t
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 always know the truth.
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,each educator has
his
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their
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 own speciality in which
his
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their
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 knowledge is impressive and sophisticated.At the same time, knowledge outside their main sphere may be on the primary school level.
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,a math professor can explain in detail the most complicated theorems and
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,
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don'
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doesn't
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t
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 have any clue about what evolution theory is and how it works.
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, tiredness
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 plays a huge role.Sometimes
teachers
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 have four or even more lectures per day.Imagine yourself standing on your feet for 5-6 hours straight and explaining things to big groups of
students
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.
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, the fact that
teachers
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 are capable of proving
his
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their
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 point in an active dispute will only enhance their authority.
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this
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 indicates that he really knows what he talks about and doesn'
t
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 just read a text from the internet.
On the other hand
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,not all criticism should be allowed only with direct relation to the theme of the subject or the ongoing conversation.Imagine a situation,
pedagogue
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a pedagogue
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 with a grade in chemistry explains how bonds in molecules work , suddenly some from the audience stand up and start to criticise the way the teacher looks or start
speech
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a speech
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 about the importance of feeding monkeys in a local zoo.It is not a
critic
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, it is a bright example of misbehaviour.
This
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 is why
such
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 performances have to be prohibited. So
i
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I
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 think that
students
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 must have
possibility
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the possibility
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 to start disputes with
teachers
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.It tends to develop argument skills
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, which
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 are very important in everyday life and can make huge contributions to a future career. In conclusion,
opportunity
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the opportunity
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 to disagree with the teacher and argue
teacher's
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the teacher's
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 opinions does not lead to the demolition of discipline and loss of respect.
On the contrary
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, it helps to reinforce authority and develop
mental
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the mental
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 skills of the masses.

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structure
Plan before you write. Start with a short intro, say both views, then give your clear view at the end.
structure
Use one idea per paragraph. Begin each paragraph with a simple topic sentence.
lexical
Use simple words. Avoid hard words. Check spelling and comma use.
examples
Give more clear examples that fit the point and stay on topic.
content
You show you know both sides of the topic.
thesis
You state your own view in the end.
content
Some real life details and examples appear.
Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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