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Some people think having a university degree is the best way to secure a good job. However, others believe skills and experience are more important. Discuss both sides and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

Nowadays, people suggest that having a
university
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 education is the excellent road to secure a
well paid
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well-paid
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 job.
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other
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others
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 consider that benefits are more crucial. In my view, these two reasons are very
importan
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important
, it depends on
type
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the type
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 of person. Well, in
this
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 essay, I
wil
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will
 discuss you, about
this
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 different perspective. On the one hand, a
university
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 degree
give
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gives
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 you more opportunities, like
:
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apply
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 you can enjoy all the
job
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jobs
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 with your best score, you can
have
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take
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every year courses
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courses every year
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 for qualification. People who have a
high
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higher
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 education,
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however
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however,
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 they have
demand
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a demand
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 for every job.
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, my friend finished the medicine
university
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 about 2 years ago, and now he has many offers in different spheres. He is a
good qualifications
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well-qualified
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 doctor, who
are having
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has
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 a good salary and excellent conditions.
On the other hand
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, in our century, are very developed Artificial Intelligence (
A.I
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A.I.
.
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apply
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)In my point of view, if the future robots and new technologies
will
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apply
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replace all the
works
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work
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. In the future,
will
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it will
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 be essential not only
high
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a high
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 degree,
however
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 your experience and skills. I talked about different aspects of
employee
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an employee
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.
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,
are
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there are
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 many companies
who
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that
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works
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work
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in
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on
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Internet
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the Internet
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 or Instagram, like SMM, they always do enterprise. For
this
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 type of
work
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work,
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 you do not need
some
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any
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 knowledge. Only your experience, Internet skills and benefits in yourself.
To sum up
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, I want to say that
,
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apply
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this
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 situation has both advantages and disadvantages.
This
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 is only about your type of future work
and
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, and
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 it depends only
of
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 your wish.
Overall
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,
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such
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apply
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as
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a
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university
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 degree
are
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is
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 very important as your experiences are very crucial.

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organization
Plan before you write. Make a short intro with your view. Use two big ideas in two body paragraphs and end with a short conclusion.
grammar
Use clear and short sentences. Avoid long chains. End each sentence with a full stop.
content
Give one or two clear examples and explain how they show your point.
lexis
Check word choice and fix small spelling mistakes. Use simple top words only.
idea
The essay tries to deal with both sides of the task and shows a view.
example
There is an example about a real life person and the idea of new tech.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • competitive advantage
  • in-depth knowledge
  • theoretical understanding
  • networking opportunities
  • prerequisite
  • professions
  • practical, hands-on knowledge
  • perform tasks efficiently and effectively
  • actual ability
  • deliver results
  • problem-solving
  • communication
  • teamwork
  • real-world settings
  • blend of both education and practical experience
  • theoretical concepts
  • ideal scenario
  • bolstered by practical application
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