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Nowadays artificial intelligence is being used to drive cars. is thiS A GOOD OR BAD THING

Artificial
Intelligence
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 plays a role in driving vehicles in recent times.
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 the advancement in technology
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 it should be seen as a positive development because it reduces the frequency of road accidents and
workload
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the workload
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 on
drivers
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. Artificial
intelligence
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 being
utilized
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 for automobiles increases the accuracy of safety measures and reduces the amount of tasks for
drivers
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 to drive efficiently. There is a high chance for safety to be precise when artificial
intelligence
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 is programmed into cars because it has been trained to identify road hazards and how to prevent accidents from happening. Imagine a world where all cars use artificial
intelligence
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, there will be no
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 of accidents because the system will be updated based on regular
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 of artificial technology to develop the
intelligence
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.
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 technology has efficiently reduced the workload on
drivers
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 to act as personal assistants;
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 will increase the output of their job positively and accurately.
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, if a driver is able to deliver 20 products on a normal day, there is a high chance to double that output because when the driver is tired, artificial
intelligence
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 is trained to cover the delivery
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drivers
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 can rest. In conclusion, the use of artificial
intelligence
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 has a positive impact on driving cars as it increases the safety and workload on human lives.

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task
Task response: The essay takes a clear line that AI in cars is good. To raise the score, add more view ideas, and give one or two real proof or facts.
structure
Coherence and cohesion: The idea link is easy to read. Use more link words to join ideas, like first, also, but, so. Start with your view in the intro and end by restating it.
language
The text is simple and easy to read.
content
Shows how AI can make roads safer and help workers at the job.
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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