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Band 2.5

More people are shopping online today than ever before. Why do people choose to shop this way? Are there any disadvantages to shopping online? Provide your opinion and use specific reasons and examples.

There is no denying the fact that most
people
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 prefer to
shop
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 online rather than
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 in real life,
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 it is commonly held belief that shopping online has severe
conceqences
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consequences
, there is
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 an argument that opposes it.
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 my opinion,
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 consider that online shopping is much
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easier
 and has more advantages.
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 is
widley
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widely
 believed that shopping online is better
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 The reasoning behind why most
people
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 tend to
shop
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 online is
because
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that
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 it is more
futuristic
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convenient
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, saves time, which is favourable for individuals who do not have the time
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to
shop
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.
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, avoid traffic, resulting
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, the ability to
shop
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 anywhere, whether you're at home, work, or any other place. Another point to consider is that
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 online shopping has its advantages, it
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 has some drawbacks,
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 as the
possiblity
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possibility
 of
low quality
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low-quality
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 products
due to
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 the
inaccuraticy
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inaccuracies
 of the pictures,
unrelible
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unreliable
 sites, causing more and more
people
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getting
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 scammed
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, a significant amount of
people
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 who find things online
cheap
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cheaply
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 or
affordable
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affordably
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immneditly
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immediately
 buy them without
vertifying
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verifying
 the website. A study in the
uk
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UK
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 showed that 38 per cent of
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individuals
 get fleeced.
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 conclusion, despite
people
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 having different views,
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personly
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personally
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 believe that online shopping is more effective for most
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individuals
 in the present time.

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task response
State your position clearly in the introduction and maintain it throughout the essay.
coherence
Develop ideas in logical order and link them with clear transitions (for example, first, then, however, in addition).
task response
Give two or three specific ideas with explanations and a simple example to support each point.
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You tried to discuss both sides of online shopping and gave a personal view.
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There is an attempt to give reasons like time-saving and convenience.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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