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Some claim that children are more aware of environmental issues than adults. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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are
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 getting more
awereness
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awareness
 regarding
the
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environmental issues
instead
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 of
older
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the older
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 generation. I totally agree with
this
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, because
younger
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 generation is in
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school and they are studying second reason is
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adocany
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advocacy
 of
greener
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a greener
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 planet on
the
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social media. One
and
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 most obvious reasons is that schooling, in
the
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school
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school,
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 they learn how to tackle the issues regarding
environment
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the environment
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. Like, which things are
distroying
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destroying
to
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the earth once they learn
they
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 reaping
to
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the consequences.
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, in
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Germany
students
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, students
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 learn
regarding
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the
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recycling
how
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, how
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 to recycle bags and bottles.
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,
earth
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the earth
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 becomes
pollution free
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pollution-free
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 and
health related
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health-related
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 problems can
reduced
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be reduced
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and
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 people can live freely. Second thing is social media,
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disseminating
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 information
become
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has become
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 easier because of certain platforms like
you tube
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YouTube
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,
instagram
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Instagram
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,
facebook
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Facebook
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 and any other. In
this
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way
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 information
come
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 to
young
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the young
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 generation because they are
most
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the main
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 users. They try to make their life more sustainable and
liveable
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livable
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.
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, there are many
pop- up
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 advertisements
who
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that
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 sell
eco friendly
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eco-friendly
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 products. They see these
kind
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kinds
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 of things
while
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 scrolling.
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, they learn the merits of
greener
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a greener
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 world. In conclusion, children learn more about the environment
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then
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than
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 older
because
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people because
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 of their age and because of activities like social and schooling effects more.

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planning
Plan your essay. Start with a short line that says your view. Then give two clear reasons. End with a short end paragraph.
content
You show a view that young people can know more about env issues.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Conscious
  • Environmental studies
  • Tech-savvy
  • Firsthand experiences
  • Conservation efforts
  • Activism
  • Sustainable habits
  • Scarcity
  • Practical understanding
  • Incorporates
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