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Some people say that the only reason for learning a foregin language is in order to travel to or work in a foreign country . Others say that these are not the only reasons why somrone should learn a foreign language . Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

Some individuals think that learning
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language
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a language
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 has only pragmatic usage
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such
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, such
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 as
traveling
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travelling
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 or working in a
foreing
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foreign
 society.
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other
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others
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 see more complicated reasons for studying
new
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a new
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language
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.
This
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 essay
discuss
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discusses
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 both opinions. It is easy to understand
first
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the first
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group
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 of people.
Indead
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Indeed
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, the
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 main
language
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 function is
comminacation
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communication
.
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Communication
 is
an
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the
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 ability to obtain and convey information with verbal and non-verbal skills.So it is pretty
logigal
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logical
 that people consider
language
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 as
an
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a
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utilizated
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utilised
 skill.Indeed,it helps
in
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on
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 trips abroad.Because if you know
interantional
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international
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language
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languages
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sush
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such
 as
english
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English
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 or
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the
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language
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 which is spoken in a country
that
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apply
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you
visit
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visit,
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 it brings clarity to conversations with locals.
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 why you have less chances to get lost or to
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become
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a frauds
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frauds
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fraud
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 victim.
Meanwhile
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 you are more likely to understand local traditions and merely enjoy your adventure
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because
 you
understant
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understand
 what is
hapening
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happening
 around.
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 second
language
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have
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has
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great
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a great
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 impact on your
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career
.Employers
are
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apply
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tend to hire
bilungual canditate
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bilingual candidates
especially
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, especially
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 in
ocupation
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occupations
 associated with interpersonal interactions.
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Furthermore
,it
identefies
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identifies
 you as
more
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a more
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deticated
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dedicated
 and organised person. because
language
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 learning
reqeires
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requires
many
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much
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 time and effort
on
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over
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long
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a long
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 period
basic
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apply
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. The second
group
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is consider
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considers
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language
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 not as something particular but as
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a spiritual
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 level thing.They think
language
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 is not the way of speaking.
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 is the way you think
and
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, and
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 it has
radical
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a radical
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 influence on your mindset.So
this
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 fact gives you
possibility
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the possibility
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 to look
on
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at
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 the world from other unseen perspective.
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Moreover
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,it allows you to understand cultural context more
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sophisticated
 and deeply.
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,learning
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a languge
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languge developes
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language develops
 your mental skills.You have to memorise tons of
diferent
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different
 information
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 you
studying
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are studying
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 and remember it in the future.
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 is a
great
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great,
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 long-lasting exercise for
brain
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the brain
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.
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Also
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Also,
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this
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 can prevent dementia caused by age. I
cant
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can't
hightligh
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highlight
 which
group
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 are
righ
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right
.Because both
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group
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groups
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 are receiving the same benefits from
laguage
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language
learning
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learning,
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 they are just hidden from them. In conclusion,despite
distinguished
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a distinguished
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 purpose for
learnign
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learning
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a language
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language
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language,
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 all groups share
equals
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equal
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 advantages so
on
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in
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 my opinion
both
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, both
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 opinions are true.

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planning
Plan an intro that tells what you will say and a short plan of the ideas.
organization
Make a main idea for every paragraph and keep to it.
coherence
Use clear links to join ideas, like 'also', 'but', 'however'.
examples
Give one clear example for each idea and explain it.
grammar
Check spelling and word form to lower errors.
lexical
Use the same topic words, like 'language', 'travel', 'job', to stay clear.
content
The essay tries to talk about both views.
structure
The idea is seen in the essay from the first lines.
structure
There is a final line that shows a view.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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