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Band 3

It is sometimes said that people should be encouraged to get married before they are 30, as this is best both for the individual and for society. Do you agree or disagree?

This
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 subject is
widley
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widely
debate
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especially
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, especially
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 toward the families that care so much about their children and their lives. There are many
prospectives
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perspectives
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toward
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on
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this
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 subject
which
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, which
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, for
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for
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in
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 my opinion it
dose
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do
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 not care much about
the
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what the
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person
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 prefers and dreams. On the one hand, part of them think about
marriage
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 as a pass to
the
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apply
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adult life
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, which
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which
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where
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 the
person
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 should know how to be
respinsible
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responsible
 and take adventures on
his
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their
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 own, but the problem
in
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with
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this
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 theory
that
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is that
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the
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apply
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marriage
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 is something more serious not just
step
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a step
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.
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, someone can go with
planned
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a planned
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marriage
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 without knowing anything about the
person
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 in front of him, without knowing the consequences that
'll
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he'll
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faced
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face
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him
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apply
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in future.
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, your partner should be nice, generous and responsible, these things couldn't have
known
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been known
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 just by one meeting.
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,
group
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a group
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 of them
feels
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feel
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 that
marriage
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 is a
fool
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foolish
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 project.
This
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 project could make them not
acheive
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achieve
 their dreams or make
thes
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them
 struggle
within
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in
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the
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apply
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life.
In other words
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, they are afraid to be responsible or to be restricted. In conclusion,
marriage
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 should not be forced below
certain
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a certain
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ages
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age
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.
Although
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,
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apply
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 these opinions could be true at some points,
suit
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they suit
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 some people's stories, but it is not a rule that must be applied
on
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to
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 all
the
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apply
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societies.
Furthermore
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,
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marriage
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the marriage
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 step must be taken by the
person
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 himself without any external effect,
this
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 will
alleviating
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alleviate
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ane
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any
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 stress which already exists
with
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in
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this
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 situation.

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task response
State your view clearly in the first paragraph.
structure
Make a simple plan: one point for, one point against, then your view.
language
Check spelling and make small grammar fixes to be understood.
task response
The essay shows some attempts to present both sides.
structure
Some linking words (On the one hand, On the other hand) are used.
Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fertility
  • Maternal health
  • Psychological stability
  • Social maturity
  • Economic benefits
  • Shared responsibilities
  • Ancestral customs
  • Cultural imperatives
  • Personal development
  • Career establishment
  • Societal norms
  • Lifestyle choices
  • Divorce rates
  • Life decisions
  • Subjective wellbeing
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