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Some people think that teachers should be able to ask disruptive children to leave the class. Do you think it is the best way to deal with a disruptive child in the classroom? What other solutions are there?

Nowadays
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 there are several pedagogy techniques
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 been introduced to manage the different
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 of students, without compromising the
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student's
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 mental health.
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, some
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 believe that
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 we should ask those
student
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 to leave their lecture who are creating
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a nuisance
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 in the classroom. In
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 I will examine the probable
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implications
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 and
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. Teachers are considered to be a key stone in any individual's life. Instructors need to find out
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 activities that
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student
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the student
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. In some
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 it has been discovered that there are some provocations
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involved by
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classmates and friends.
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of figuring
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 out the actual issue
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 will lead to a drop in
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the moral
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 level of
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the student
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student
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students
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. For
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 some
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researchers
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 suggest that kids are more emotionally vulnerable
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 if we
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 not deal with them carefully, we may spoil someone's childhood. New
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 needs to be carried out to overhaul the education techniques. Teaching institutions need to dive into psychology thoroughly to invent
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 model for dealing
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such
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 children.
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 to that, they need to
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 the behaviour into different levels and asking them to leave the lecture would be the
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 resort for an instructor.
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, these individuals are our shining
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future,
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 we need to preserve them nicely. In conclusion,
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 the immediate peace of the classroom is important, it should not be achieved at the expense of a child's mental health. We must keep mental well-being paramount. Through more
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 studies and the implementation of empathetic disciplinary models, we can foster a better environment for the students who are, after all, our future.

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task response
State your view in the opening and keep that view in the rest of the essay.
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Give one or two clear, easy examples from school life to show what could happen.
structure
Use fewer long sentences. Break ideas into small, clear lines.
coherence
Link ideas well with simple words like and, but, also, then.
grammar
Check grammar and use correct verb forms to avoid errors.
content
The essay shows care for students' mental health and a plan to use better methods.
structure
There is a clear plan to find new ways and to avoid harming students.
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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • disruptive
  • behavior
  • classroom
  • solution
  • approach
  • implement
  • positive reinforcement
  • rewards
  • additional support
  • resources
  • counseling
  • therapy
  • involving
  • parents
  • guardians
  • supportive
  • inclusive
  • classroom environment
  • managing
  • effective
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