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In some countries, there has been an increase in the number of parents who educate their children themselves at home instead of sending them to school. Do you think the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

There has been a tendency towards
home
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education
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, which is carried out solely by
parents
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instead
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 of sending
children
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 to
school
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. It is difficult to imagine that the perks of homeschooling are greater than its drawbacks, because kids lack social interaction and their
parents
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 are not well qualified,
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such
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children
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 can have personalised learning and a safe learning environment. Students can learn lessons at their own pace because of adjustments to teaching style and teaching style
according to
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 their abilities when they study at
home
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.
This
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 is largely because lessons are taught depending on their strong and weak points, which
help
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parents
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 to teach
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curriculums
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in
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 the child’s learning speed
instead
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 of moving at a fixed pace in
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.
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, struggling students who fall behind in
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the classrooms
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classrooms
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 can receive extra attention from their
parents
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 in their studies.
Furthermore
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,
home
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education
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 protects
children
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 from the possibility of bullying, violence, and negative peer pressure in classes, because at
home
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, they are far from
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 negative social influences, studying in a safe and controlled learning environment. A clear example of
this
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 is that teenagers at
school
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 may feel peer pressure to smoke, skip classes, and engage in harmful activities, leading to loss of concentration in class.
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, for these reasons,
such
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 as a one-size-fits-all
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 system and harmful social
behaviors
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behaviours
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 at
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, many
parents
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 prefer
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 at
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 for their
children
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.
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, homeschooling does not develop
children
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’s communication and teamwork skills, and their
parents
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 lack professional teaching skills in
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 subjects.
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,
such
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 people become isolated from the community and struggle to cooperate with others.
However
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, schools provide opportunities to interact with groupmates and promote teamwork skills that are crucial in teenagers’ future, particularly in career prospects. Consider the example of two employees in the workplace: the first worker studied at
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 and attended many
school
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 events, and the latter one only received
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education
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 and was far from kids. Of course, both of them will be the best in their field, but a homeschooled worker cannot work properly in teamwork duties and will not attend any social gatherings.
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,
parents
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 can sometimes make mistakes in explaining the concepts of some STEM subjects, particularly math, physics, and engineering, because of their low awareness of
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 curricula. Not only does it cause problems for the understanding of students, but it
also
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 prevents
children
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 from working in job sectors that are
specialized
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 in
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 kind of subjects. Over time,
home
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education
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 brings difficulties to kids in collaborative environments and misinterpretation of complex concepts.
To sum up
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, even though
home
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education
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 keeps
children
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 away from the failure of schools to accommodate individual learning speeds and harmful behaviours, it cannot create social environments and cover the
school
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 lessons professionally as teachers.

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task
Plan a clear view at the start. State your main idea, then give two side ideas, and finish with a clear conclusion.
coherence
Make links between ideas. Use simple join words like 'also','but','however','and 'for example' to move from one point to the next.
task
Be fair in how you talk about the other side so your view stays strong but not harsh.
task achievement
Clear stance on the topic throughout the essay.
coherence
Good use of examples to show benefits and drawbacks.
coherence
Some strong linking between ideas.
Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • homeschooling
  • flexibility
  • individual learning style
  • family bonds
  • safer environment
  • bullying
  • peer pressure
  • educational resources
  • socialization
  • commitment
  • diverse viewpoints
  • narrow worldview
  • gaps in learning
  • community programs
  • educational travels
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