The line graph below shows the percentage of tourists to England who visited four different attractions in Brighton. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart provides information about the proportion of visitors
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who
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attended
entraitments
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entertainment
in Brighton, England over a 30-year period from 1980 to 2010.
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, it can be clearly seen that only Pier and Pavilion revealed an upward trend. Another striking feature is that after 1985 art gallery demonstrated a downward pattern. Looking at the details, as regards
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the Festival
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and Art
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they experienced a reduction.
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, Art Gallery increased
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substantially
during
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five-year period, from 20 to
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40
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percent
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per cent
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.
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,
after
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this
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it indicated
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fall and in 2010 accounted for around ten
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. Regarding
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the Festival
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, at the beginning it was 30
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and
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at the same level over the period in question with tiny deviations.
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, when it comes to Pavilion and Pier, it went in the opposite direction.
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, Pier was at ten
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percent
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and illustrated a fluctuation
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two decades.
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, in 2000 it witnessed
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improvment
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improvement
and in the end made up approximately 20
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per cent
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. By the way, in
1980
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1980,
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Pavilion was between 20 and 30
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percent
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and revealed
dramatic
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a dramatic
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rise to almost 50
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percent
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per cent
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in 1995, but
following
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this
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this,
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it experienced
considerable
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a considerable
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decline and in 2010 was 30
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percent
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per cent
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.

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