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The bar chart below gives information about four countries spending habits of shopping on consumer goods in 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart illustrates information about
people
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 in four countries spending money on goods and services in 2012.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the population in
Britain
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 dominated in all sectors, with more than one hundred fifty-five
pounds
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 sterling in each sector. In Belgium paid the highest amount
for
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was paid for
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 goods
fot
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for
 outdoor game accessories,
exactly150
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exactly 150
thousand
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pounds
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,
while
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 in Spain,
people
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spend
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spent
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 much for toys, more than 150
thousand
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pounds
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.
Britain
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 mostly paid for cameras, the same as Austria,
event
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even
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 though
Britain
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 paid more than Austria. In Belgium, books became the sector with the lowest spending in terms of money spent.
People
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 paid below 145
thousand
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pounds
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 for books. Meanwhile, in Spain,
people
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not
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did not
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spended
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spend
 it
for
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on
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 console games. It
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also
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is also
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same
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the same
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like
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as
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 in
Britain
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,
although
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 they spent a bit more than
Spain
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in Spain
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. In Austria, outdoor game accessories were
opposite
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the opposite
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 of those
of
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in
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the
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apply
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Belguim
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Belgium
.
People
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spending
Verb problem
are spending
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 around 140
thousand
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pounds
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fot
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on
this
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 sector.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, britain, pounds, thousand with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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