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Some people argue that being highly qualified is the only way to ensure high paying jobs while other believe that having work experience is the best way to get a well paying job. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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In
 today’s generation, competition in any field when it comes to work is tough.
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tend to believe that having the right skill for the position makes the person qualified.
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, for others, work experience and the duration of working in a
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 can get you into a higher position. In
this
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 essay, I will discuss both sides and give my own opinion. To commence with, to be qualified for one position, the applicant should be fit and have all the right qualities of the
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. Others tend to believe that having a degree, certificates, and self-projects can make them accepted in the job that they wanted.
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, if the person is dedicated to his/her study from the beginning, they will have perfect grades, which can impress the interviewers,
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 self-studying and preparing themselves, to be totally qualified to have a bigger chance
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 in it.
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, not all people can be highly qualified. For some, being at the
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 and in the same field for a longer time can make them be promoted.
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, the
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 itself will see their dedication and effort on their own, given the chance to be promoted to a higher rank and better salary.
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, in my opinion, it’s better to be highly qualified for the work you have always dreamt of.
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 the tool to be part of the
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 you are applying to, being competitive and skilled, and being the right person for the job.
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, if you’re already in it, do your best to stay longer and dedicate all of your energy to the job, so that there is a chance of higher pay, and experiences can help promote yourself.

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task
Plan with a clear view in the first lines and keep it simple. Add one or two short, clear ideas to back it up.
cohesion
Make sure each idea links well to the next one. Use short sentences and clear joins.
structure
The essay has a clear plan with four parts: intro, two ideas, and a conclusion.
cohesion
Good use of linking words like On the other hand and To conclude.
opinion
The writer gives a view at the end, so the reader knows the position.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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