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your english speaking friend who lives in your town has asked for your advice about learning a new sport. write an email to your friend.in your email: recommend a new sport that would be suitable for your friend to learn. explain how your friend could learn this sport. suggest that you both learn this sport together.

Dear Mahsa
i
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 hope you are ok.
i
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I
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 would like to write
for
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apply
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you
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apply
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to
recommende
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recommend
 a new
sport
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 which
i
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I
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 have recently heard
from
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about from
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 a friend of mine. She told me about rock
climbing
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climbing,
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that
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which
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 is
extremley
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extremely
 popular among people in our town.
According to
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 your personal features
both
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, both
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 inside and
outside
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outside,
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 that
i
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I
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 know about you,
this
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sport
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 is really suitable for you to learn.
For
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example
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 you are tall and have strong hands. Learning
this
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sport
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 only needs some training and
equipments
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equipment
. As far as
i
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I
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 know, you can
enroll
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enrol
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 in the class online, you just need to complete a form
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then
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, then
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 participate in the class as soon as possible. Hopefully,
i
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I
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 tend to come with you
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this
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to this
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 class because
i
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I
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 have plenty of time to join you and learn
this
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sport
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,
also
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this
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sport
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not only is
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is not only
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 useful for our body but
also
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 beneficial for our mental health.
Finally
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,
i
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I
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 would like to see you successful in
this
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sport
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 soon. your best friend shiva

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organization
Use one idea per paragraph. Start with a friendly hello, say the sport you choose, then say how to learn it, and finish with a line to end.
grammar
Fix small errors in spelling and mark. Use I, capital. Use periods and commas to link ideas.
content
Give more clear reasons why the sport fits your friend and give more easy steps to learn it. Use simple, real examples.
tone
Tone is kind and warm. It shows you care for your friend.
content
The idea of doing the sport together is clear and nice.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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